Wesley, I like your poem , I thought the mix of the languages mixed well and helped out a lot with what your background is . Elissa, I always love love love your work, your poem really showed your spanish side (Really detailed) Nayara, your poem seemed very homey, and family like, which happens to be a good thing since its about your ancestors. (: Marlyssa, i really liked the little story you had behind your poem because of the research you out into it . All in all , the poems I've heard so far are good .
Wesley- Your poem was awesome. I love the story and rhythm to it. Nayara- The words were powerful to me. I like the way they were used. Lymarie- All in all it was a beautiful poem with a message to it. Nick- It was so great no words in my vocabulary are worthy of it! Elissa- I love it. It's written so well. I don't think I can make any words worthy of your poem either :D
So far great. To all of yall who didn't post it yet. . . Beeil dich! (hurry it up!) I want see them.
Wesley: I found your piece to be truly heart-felt. With the perfect mixture of personality and culture, I think you did a wonderful job. A poem is penned; a story is told. – Unknown author
Elissa: I am very glad you shared your work with the class. Never be afraid to do so, as outside-sources are far more apt to see the spark of brilliance which your own eyes may be blind to. The sense of cultural pride struck me as genuine; overall a great piece!
Nayara: Again, the sense of culture and family conveyed in your writing is inspiring. Great work!
Marlyssa: Fantastic job! I love the historical aspects of your poem. Something I feel many individuals forget is how closely related English literature is to world history. You did a fine job at merging culture and family: great job!
Lymarie: Great job! I found multiple facets of your poem sad, but not necessarily by way of emotion, but rather by way of something far more profound. That being said, sometimes bad serves to illuminate good, and sometimes it just serves to make a point. Either way, you did a marvelous job!
By the by: the sheer notion of placing upon the eyelids of children Vicks’ vapor rub is disturbing and ultimately a phenomenon which I was completely foreign to.
Sorry it took me so long, I totally forgot about this last night! Here is mine!
My people, half of whom come from a country known for fashion and food. The other half from the country that gave us The Beatles.
My people, who at one point hated each other, when the French helped the USA escape the tyranny that was once England.
My people, who all worked hard for a family, not knowing that one day a fifteen year old girl would write a poem about them, people she will never meet.
My people, until the day I die. But not because they were some extraordinary group of nobility and honor, but because they are my family and the choices they made landed me and my sisters where our generation is today.
My people, who will never be just ‘my people’ and who will share a history with me and a million others, who are all proud of where we come from.
Wesley, I like your poem , I thought the mix of the languages mixed well and helped out a lot with what your background is .
ReplyDeleteElissa, I always love love love your work, your poem really showed your spanish side (Really detailed)
Nayara, your poem seemed very homey, and family like, which happens to be a good thing since its about your ancestors. (:
Marlyssa, i really liked the little story you had behind your poem because of the research you out into it .
All in all , the poems I've heard so far are good .
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ReplyDeleteWesley- Your poem was awesome. I love the story and rhythm to it.
ReplyDeleteNayara- The words were powerful to me. I like the way they were used.
Lymarie- All in all it was a beautiful poem with a message to it.
Nick- It was so great no words in my vocabulary are worthy of it!
Elissa- I love it. It's written so well. I don't think I can make any words worthy of your poem either :D
So far great. To all of yall who didn't post it yet. . . Beeil dich! (hurry it up!) I want see them.
Comments (In brief):
ReplyDeleteWesley:
I found your piece to be truly heart-felt. With the perfect mixture of personality and culture, I think you did a wonderful job.
A poem is penned; a story is told. – Unknown author
Elissa:
I am very glad you shared your work with the class. Never be afraid to do so, as outside-sources are far more apt to see the spark of brilliance which your own eyes may be blind to. The sense of cultural pride struck me as genuine; overall a great piece!
Nayara:
Again, the sense of culture and family conveyed in your writing is inspiring. Great work!
Marlyssa:
Fantastic job! I love the historical aspects of your poem. Something I feel many individuals forget is how closely related English literature is to world history. You did a fine job at merging culture and family: great job!
Lymarie:
Great job! I found multiple facets of your poem sad, but not necessarily by way of emotion, but rather by way of something far more profound. That being said, sometimes bad serves to illuminate good, and sometimes it just serves to make a point. Either way, you did a marvelous job!
By the by: the sheer notion of placing upon the eyelids of children Vicks’ vapor rub is disturbing and ultimately a phenomenon which I was completely foreign to.
-Nicholas F.
Sorry it took me so long, I totally forgot about this last night! Here is mine!
ReplyDeleteMy people,
half of whom come from
a country known for fashion
and food.
The other half
from the country
that gave us The Beatles.
My people,
who at one point hated each other,
when the French helped the USA
escape the tyranny that was once England.
My people,
who all worked hard for a family,
not knowing that one day
a fifteen year old girl
would write a poem about them,
people she will never meet.
My people,
until the day I die.
But not because they were some extraordinary group
of nobility and honor,
but because they are my family
and the choices they made
landed me and my sisters
where our generation is today.
My people,
who will never be just
‘my people’
and who will share a history
with me and a million others,
who are all proud of where we come from.
I don't think it is long enough.
Elissa, Wesly and Marlyssa: I like how you both put spanish into your poems.
ReplyDeleteElissa: The way it was written showed your pride.
Wesly:The rhythm flowed with the way it was written.
Marlyssa:Also, how you had your story put behind it.
Lymarie: It was sad and emotional. I can connect to it in some ways. The part of the vicks was catchy.
Oops, I mean three*
ReplyDeleteI love your poem Katherine! Nice mix of present and past! :D
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